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Home schooling belongs in the past and is acceptable in the modern society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#home #society
Every story has two sides and
home schooling
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 is not an exception. In the
past
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 it was regarded as the most natural way of educating children, but today it attracts a lot of criticism. We must acknowledge that
parents
 know their children best. That gives them a good chance of figuring
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 to help their
child
 understand certain concepts. Using their
child
's interests,
parents
 can make
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proc learning more enjoyable and effective.
In addition
,
home
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the home
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 environment makes a
child
 feel safe, which
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 their ability to concentrate on studying.
Nevertheless
, many people believe that teaching should be done by professionals. There are many proven scientific approaches that produce good results, and without those techniques
parents
 who teach their kids at
home
 have fewer chances of success. Associative learning is a good example of
such
 a technique. Showing
child
 images while teaching the alphabet (apple for "a", boy for "b") helps him or
her
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 remember the letters and easier.
In addition
, not every parent is capable of teaching their
child
 at
home
 because the blind cannot lead the blind.
Parents
 are unable to teach children something they don't know themselves, and to be perfectly honest, n
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 have a profound knowledge of history or geography even on a school textbook level. Eventually, even t mums and dads who succeeded at school could forget some material with the passage of time. To sum up, being familiar with the
child
's personality cannot replace the need for
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qualification
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 that reason I have more trust in the abilities and experience of teachers than I do in my own.
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