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IELTS 15 Test4 In many countries, paying for things using mobile phone (cell phone) apps is becoming increasingly common. Does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, people increasingly spend money on applications on
the
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smartphone. In
this
 development way, advantages outweigh disadvantages for the certain benefit like useful and
entertainment
 application Undeniable, paying for something in some apps is conspicuous consumption.
In contrast
, in some situations, we provide the benefits of paying for something useful for education and shortcut our goal. Especially in educational applications, clients are able to dwell in their fascinating learning
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 for achieving their goals.
For instance
, Udemy is an application for learning skills when users pay for their interested courses, they can access the course for unlimited, in
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, they can learn their whole life.
Thus
, paying for useful
things
 in
the
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smartphone apps is the one of most advantages of
this
 development. Before the present, we need to about to outdoor for finding
entertainment
,
for example
, game
center
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 or treater. Nowadays, we can enjoy these
things
 from our homes by spending our money on
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applications. Not only play games with our friends or watch our interesting movies on our sofa but,
also
 be a friend with people who have the same tastes as us.
For example
, I like movies in the type of Lovecraft
that is
 rarely watched. But I can pay 10 US dollars to Netflix for watching the Lovecraft genre and other movies for a month
then
 find some community on Reddit for speaking Lovecraft
topic
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.
Thus
, spending money on
entertainment
 is a main of benefits in
this
 development. To conclude, useful and
entertainment
things
 are the reason why paying for
things
 in the mobile phone application has more advantages than disadvantages.
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