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You are having a graduation party next Sunday evening. You have invited over 25 people to celebrate in your garden, which may continue late into the night. Write a letter to the Chairman of the Housing Society. In your letter: · Explain what will be happening · Offer your apologies in advance · Invite him to join the celebration

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Dear Mr.Smith, I am writing
this
 letter to inform you about our graduation
party
, that I am hosting, which may get extended till late light. My name is Sandeep and currently live in a detached house 32B in our society. As you know, I will be completing my graduation next week. Our college decided to organize a grand
party
 at "The Villa" resort. Unfortunately, the resort cancelled our booking at the
last
 moment, so we decided to host the graduation
party
 celebration at my house, next Sunday, for my 25 classmates.
Initially
, We planned
this
party
 in the evening;
however
, some of my classmates were busy in the evening requesting to extend the
party
 hours to midnight. We promise to make less noise and play music only till 10 pm.
Also
, to avoid inconvenience to neighbours we will adhere to societal policies.
Additionally
, I would request guests to be considerate toward others and avoid causing issues for neighbours.
Finally
, I would
also
 like to invite you to share your college experiences with us and motivate us for our future journey. Yours sincerely, Sandeep
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coherence cohesion
To enhance your coherence and cohesion, try to ensure each paragraph has a single, clear idea. For example, separating the apology paragraph from the details of the event would improve readability.
task achievement
Provide a more thorough introduction of yourself and specifics about the event in the opening paragraph for a clearer task response.
coherence cohesion
The letter has a warm and inviting closing, which contributes positively to the interaction.
task achievement
The tone is polite and appropriate for the context, making the request and invitation well-received.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • significant milestone
  • personal achievement
  • celebration
  • attendees
  • venue
  • advance apologies
  • inconvenience
  • noise level
  • parking arrangements
  • warm invitation
  • festivities
  • get to know
  • minimize disruption
  • considerate parking
  • neighborhood harmony
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