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Children today are too dependent on computers and electronic entertainment. it would be better to encourage them to spend more time outside playing sports. d you agree or disagree

#children #computers #entertainment #time #sports
Nowadays,
children
 are addicted to electronic devices
such
 as
computer
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computers
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 and mobile
phone
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phones
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exteremly
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extremely
. It is dangerous for their development process.According to me,
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children
childeren
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children
 is supposed to focus on outside
activities
 like playing
sports
.Two essential
factor
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factors
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 push me to think like these.One of them is that
children
 those making sport have
sucsesful
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successful
acedemic
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academic
life
.
Secondly
, making sport improve
children
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children's
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 self-esteem directly in their daily
life
. There are different
type
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 of
metod
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method
theachers
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teachers
 apply to raise their
students
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student's
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sucsess
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success
such
 as making
litlle
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little
quiz
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quizzes
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 regularly or
encouaging
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encouraging
 their
students
 to reading
a books
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books
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... Of
course
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,course
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 those
activities
 are
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necessary
neccesary
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necessary
 for
students
acedemic
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academic
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life
lives
lifes
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lives
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. But there are not enough for
sucsess
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success
. Surveys done show us,
sports
activities
 have powerful and
unbeliaveble
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unbelievable
 impact over
students
 school
sucsess
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success
.
Instead
 of spending their free time
by
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playing computer games,
students
 should be directed outside
sports
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activities
activites
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activities
. During to course of my
sister
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sister's
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childhood
chilhood
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childhood
, I push her to
playing
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play
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volleyball
voleyball
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volleyball
.
As
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 the
times
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time
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, she adapts herself to playing
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volleyball
voleyball
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volleyball
. One
years
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year
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 later, we used to get positive feedback from her
theachers
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teachers
.
Curiosly
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Curiously
 enough, sport makes
amazing
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an amazing
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 difference
over
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in
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 my
sister
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sister's
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academic
acedemic
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academic
life
. With the commence of
thecnology
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technology
 age, most
of
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apply
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the teenager
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teenager
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teenagers
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 lost their
times
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time
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 in front of the computer or phone. It causes limited social connection and friendship
life
. When they go to
social
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area
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areas
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, they do not know how they
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should
shoul
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should
 behave.It drops out their
self esteem
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self-esteem
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.
Absence
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 of social bound
,
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 may lead them
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depression
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to depresssion
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depresssion
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depression
. To prevent those
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scenarios
senior
senarios
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scenarios
 parents should take
responsibilities
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responsibility
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 and direct their
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children's
children
childrens
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children
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 outside sportive
activities
. Especially, generation X
spend
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spends
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 most of their
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childhood
chilhood
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childhood
times
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time
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 at outside
sports
.It is clear that these opportunities play
important
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an important
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 role
over
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in
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their
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 development of self-confidence process.
That is
 the reason why they called
key
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the key
a key
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 locked
child
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children
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. Generation x
keep
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keeps
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home's
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home
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 keys on their packets.After
turn
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turning
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 back
home
 from outside
activities
 they used to get
home
 on their own even
their
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 parents do not stay
home
.Even they manage domestic
works
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work
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 after outside sportive
activities
:)
As a result
, without any doubt,
children
 have
to
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support for sportive
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activities
activies
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activities
.It helps them to increase their academic
sucsess
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success
 and self-confidence.
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