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Fresh water has always been a limited resource in some parts of the world. Today, however, growing worldwide demand has made this a global problem. What are the causes of the increased demand, and what measures could governments and individuals take to respond to this problem?

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it is true that the water available to
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 decreasing
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 by
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. there are several reasons for
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 situation. But, steps can be taken to tackle the problem by the government and community. İn my opinion, there are a lot of factors for the decline of the element that all living things need.
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, even developed societies waste water unconsciously in their factories, offices, and homes.
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, everybody takes a shower in the morning and spends a long time in the bathroom.
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, the rise in the human population will increase the request for use.
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, communities have begun to care more important to protect themselves from bacterial and viral diseases.
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, there has been an enhancement in need.
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, in the corona virüs epidemic,
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 were washing their hands 30 times a
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. İf we examine the measures that the government can take, It may build more treatment plants in order to arrive water for
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 fastly.
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, The fee of using in the home should be more expensive.
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, nobody can use it unconsciously. At the same time, the punishment of pollute nature must be aggravated. Non-governmental organizations might have more authority that protects the environment.
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, in my country, there is an organization that name is ‘Yeşilay’. İt inform the Turkish
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 and the whole World about our responsibilities to protect our natural resources. In conclusion, the administration is supposed to impose a sanction and should prevent unnecessary use because several reasons boost the need and consume in every
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