In many countries, teenagers are encouraged to do part-time jobs. What's the situation like in your country? What do yout think are the advantages and disvanatges of doing part-time jobs?

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day and ,age various nations are motivating the public aged between 13 to 18 to do part-
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work . In my country
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the situation remains the same. Every scenario has its own pros and cons . Let us discuss in detail about
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,the merits of Part-
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task is apparent and it has a wide variety of benefits. To start with , At
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young age ,
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will learn to manage their own funds if they earn their own pocket money.
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, the Lavish spending trends can be seen if the cash is given by their parents. if it is their own hard-earned money people tend to spend less and invest significantly.
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will learn to manage their future . In
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management plays a crucial role .
Students
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are in
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charge
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charge
of their
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.They need to allocate
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for studies as well as employment. To Conclude ,
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pupil
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pupils
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will gain
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control over their
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management and cash flow. Admittedly, Part
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jobs will have their own drawbacks .
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, If
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have more money in
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, they will spend
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unnecessary
unncessart
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unnecessary
things .
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may spend more on partying which is the trend among college
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it will have an effect on their health conditions . They may not have a healthy lifestyle and proper
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management . They are stressed to complete the task and move to their jobs . They will not find a schedule to eat and take rest. Having considered all the above arguments ,
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would conclude that it depends on individuals to take the responsibilities of managing
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funds
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and health . They should control their emotions by not allowing
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to reach their mind .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • part-time jobs
  • teenagers
  • pocket money
  • work experience
  • responsibility
  • time management
  • adult responsibilities
  • social skills
  • empower
  • independence
  • financial management
  • academic performance
  • exploitation
  • working conditions
  • stress
  • fatigue
  • discipline
  • work ethic
  • job market
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