Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problerms are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive ora negative development?

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Today,a lot of people who have a disease are trying to

use

medicine and they want fewer go to the usual doctors , I think that had a negative change. People who are feeling ill should not

use

medicines and treatment without visiting a

doctor

firstly

, if they are using incorrect medicines and that caused other problems,

instead

, they may think that they have a cold and

use

cold-stop but that wasn’t it and they are eating the wrong tablet.

Secondly

, maybe their

health

problems are serious and should be controlled by doctors before it's too late.

Finally

, using drugs without a

doctor

's prescription has risks for ourselves and they would bring a bad effect on our

health

. On another hand, when our

health

is not completely good it is better that we are visiting a perfect

doctor

and see our

problem

firstly

, the

doctor

examines the conditions of our

health

,for

instead

, a blood test would require finding an exact

problem

Secondly

, our illness maybe is a serious

problem

and do not need any drugs.

Finally

,we have a comfortable mentality that we do rational and correct work. In conclusion, when people are feeling have a

health

problem

,they do not

use

self-treatment and eat drugs that they think are useful for their illness,

instead

, they should visit a good

doctor

and say their

problem

to him.

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Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problerms are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive ora negative development?

Fully explain your ideas

Many people aim to achieve balance between work and life, but only a few people achieve it. What problems will be caused by poor work-life balance? How can its negative impacts be prevented?

You recently stayed at a hotel for a conference with your company and there were several problems with your room. Write to the hotel management to complain. In the letter, you should: • Where you stayed • What the problems were • How they can fix your complaints

it is argues that mobile phones/gadgets have no space in classrooms. agree or disagree?

The percentage of overweight children in western society has increased by almost 20% in the last ten years. Discuss the causes and effects of this disturbing trend.

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?