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In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

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In the future, there are will be more
people
 opting to spend their holidays in their own country rather than in another country. I completely agree with
this
 point of view because travelling abroad would become unaffordable for more and more
people
 due to
inflation
 and automation.
Inflation
 has hit its highest level in decades in many countries. Back
then
, before
inflation
 took off in 2021, the amount of
money
 needed to maintain a given standard of living was lower.
Therefore
, it wasn’t very hard for an average person to save some
money
 for an international trip.
However
, now
inflation
 has increased the cost of living to a record high and some economists fear that
this
 might
last
 for a long time.
That is
 to say, in the future, after paying rent or mortgage and buying necessities, many
people
 wouldn’t have
money
 left to travel abroad to enjoy their holiday. They might just travel domestically, which would be way cheaper. Many
people
 would lose their jobs to robots. So far cheap countries like Thailand and Indonesia haven’t been out of reach even for those who don’t make much
money
 every month. But, sooner or later, humanless technologies,
such
 as driverless cars and Amazon cashier-less stores, would mature. By that time, many low-level workers would be made redundant. They might struggle to make a living, let alone fly to another country to enjoy a fancy holiday. In conclusion, in the future, it will be less common for
people
 to travel abroad on holiday and
inflation
 and humanless technology are to blame.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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