It is a natural process for animal species to become extinct (e.g. dinosaur, dodo…) There is no reason why people should try to prevent this from happening. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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no reason for people

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protect animal

species

from extinction as it is the result of evolution

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it even happens in the

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absence

abbsence

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absence

of human intervention. In my opinion, I disagree with

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view

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selfish human

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as hunting, industrialization and pollution are responsible for

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happening.

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environmental factors

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an important role in natural habitats for animal

species

and many rare animals were extinct by climate

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such

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such

dinasours

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dinosaurs

, dodos.

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, the number of trees, being the

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accommodation

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of them are cut down in order to clear the area for vast industries. It can be seen that endangered

species

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out from nature as the industrial

activities

of humans

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these days

that lead to

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the habitats of wild animals.

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, not only the wild animals

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affected by

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human

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but the sea creatures were exploited because of the expanding seafood market which is

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major disruption of fish in the seabed.

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we are still killing them as present gear. It will attribute to the collapse of the sea environment. It can be seen that

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the uncontrol

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human

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will lead to the permanent disappearance of some sea

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. In conclusion, it is undeniable that

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are the major contributor to animal extinction and I think that people should preserve those

species

in order to

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keep

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bio diversity

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existence.

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Topic Vocabulary:

extinction
evolution
biodiversity
ecosystem
habitat destruction
climate change
conservation
irreversible
ecological balance
species preservation
environmental ethics
sustainability
endangered species
natural selection
ecosystem services
wildlife protection
moral obligation
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