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The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart represents the average
age
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 of the populations of
Yemen
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 and Italy in 2000 and a transforming change in the
age
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 demographic groups
that is
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 predicted by 2050. Each pie chart is divided into three segments which indicate the percentage of three main
age
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 demographic groups. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that
atin
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at
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the Milleniummillenium
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 the
working-
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age
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population
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 formed the majority in Italy (61.6%),
while
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 in
Yemen
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the
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half of the citizens were children and young adolescents. Comparing the number of
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elderly
population
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 in both countries in 2000, the sharp difference is obvious since it was eight times less in
Yemen
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 than in Italy. The projection for 2050 in
Yemen
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 illustrates that the percentage of 60+ people will be roughly the same
while
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 the
working-
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age
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population
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 will marginally have increased at the expense of a reduction
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of
 the number of
0-14-year-olds14 year olds
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. The
age
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 demographic change in 50 years in Italy predicts the number of elderly people will be doubled
due to
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 the decline of the
working-
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age
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population
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 and by 2050 the correlation will amount to more or less equal (42.3% to 46.2%
accordingly
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). The decrease
of
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child
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the child
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population
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 is
also
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 forecast but as negligible. It is worth mentioning that Italy is experiencing the senescence of its
population
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while
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Yemen
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 might get more
working-
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age
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 people by 2050.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, yemen, working-age, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population distribution
  • age group
  • population pyramid
  • projections
  • young population
  • aging population
  • demographic shift
  • increase in elderly population
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • population dynamics
  • top-heavy
  • balanced age distribution
  • healthcare needs
  • pension provision
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