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Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

#people #climate #change
Some people believe that
instead
 of dealing with
climate
 change, we need to find a way to cope with it. I think, that there are no chances to
be agree
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 with the
second
 statement. Because human activities
is
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are
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 the biggest source of harm to our planet.
Firstly
, if we do not think about how to reduce our effect
to
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 the
climate
, we will not be able to predict for what
next
 changes we need to be prepared. The more impact on
climate
 we produce - the more unpredictably can be a reply from our nature.
Nevertheless
, some people used to blame
whoever
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 they want,
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instead
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in stead
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instead
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 of themselves.
Moreover
, when someone says that we do not need to think about preventing
climate
 change, it seems to me like
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excuse
exuce
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. To treat our planet that way -
it
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is not fair. Humanity always
need
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 to think
and
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 evaluate the damage we produce to our nature. Because without our understanding of it, it is not possible to stop and reduce it at all. And capacity of our planet is not endless.
Furthermore
, if we do not think about our activities, our general pollution effect will never be lowered. But it needs to be reduced, for sure. All human processes affect more and more things.
The
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Climate
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climate
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change
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chance
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 is not only one problem. There are so many different ones,
such
 as water consumption, energy production, deforestation, waste utilisation, etc. To summarize, I want to say, that
make
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 our world better is not
such
 a complicated thing. Just everyone should start to think and analyze. The greatest changes possible only if all people will cooperate and start to do something more
then
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than
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 kill
our
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nature.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • prevent
  • adaptation
  • mitigation
  • cope with
  • effects
  • shift
  • mindset
  • lifestyle
  • balance
  • invest
  • research
  • technology
  • crucial
  • education
  • awareness
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