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The two graphs give us information about the amount of grease consumption and the employment in the grease industry in a particular country in the period of 1950 and 2010. Overall, it is noticeable that the annual consumption was growing and the unemployment estimate decreased over years. In detail, people started to consume the coat more in 1960,
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, it had reached 40 million barrels by 2000, after a sharp increase. Eventually, it reached its highest peak at slightly above 50 million barrels in 2010. In 1950, only 1000 people were employed in the oil sphere, while the rate of unemployment accounted for 4%. 1960 and 1970 saw a meagre change in both figures,
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, more workers were recruited in 1980, accounting for 1800, when only 3.1% of the nation was without occupation. After that, the rates had been gradually increasing. People in the industry became more, reverse proportionally to the rate of unemployment, accounting for 3100 inhabitants and 1.6% in 2010, respectively.

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