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Some People view teenage conflict with their parents as a necessary part for growing up, whilst others see it as something negative which should be avoided

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There is no doubt that
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 period includes many contentions which affect all family members.Some people believe that disagreements between parents and their teenagers can be crucial to their maturity, while
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 think it has a
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 impact and should be handled On the one hand, people who assume disputes have negative results on the family may argue that it might damage
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 interaction.
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 high levels of tension in the family's atmosphere.
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, some
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 people tend to smoke regardless of the consequences.
Thus
 the resulting confrontations with parents can impair their communication together.
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 no arguments, there will be a greater sense of satisfaction among family members.
On the other hand
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 who reckon that inconsistency among family can help in developing ways of communication.
This
 is because conflict enables teens to maintain their own perspectives and opinions.
For instance
, if the family's tradition is making their boys play football they will have the chance to discuss the alternative choices with their family
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However
, if they can not explain what they want that would be
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 they will not be able to make individualized decisions. In conclusion,
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 cons and pros according to
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which way it's dealt with. In my opinion,
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the advantages
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 outweigh the disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • autonomy
  • individuality
  • emotional intelligence
  • conflict resolution skills
  • persistent
  • unresolved
  • communication gaps
  • rebellious behavior
  • substance abuse
  • mental health issues
  • critical skills
  • deeper understanding
  • family dynamics
  • quest for independence
  • crucial for adulthood
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