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With the improvements in today’s health care, society has to care for more and more elderly people. Do you feel that society will be able to cope with the increase in numbers of elderly people today and how can it be managed?

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Nowadays, health
care
 takes
enormous
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 part of our lives.
Therefore
, we should
care
 more for elderly
people
. Indeed, I strongly feel, that our
society
 will be absolutely able to cope with
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the
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te
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the
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 increase in
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the numbers
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numbers
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number
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 of elderly
people
.
Firstly
, each elderly person deserves attention and
care
. We must respect them,
hence
, the best method to
care
about
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for
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 elderly
people
 - help them.
Society
 should visit their mother, father, grandmothers and grandfathers more frequently, especially, if they
are suffer
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are suffering
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 from diseases.
Secondly
, colossal influence on
care
 can
povide
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provide
 government. I hold the view, that government should provide more benefits for
people
in
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of
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 age.
For instance
, add more free and high-quality medical help, encourage
volonteers
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volunteers
, and provide social workers.
However
, how will
society
 cope with the increase in
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the numbers
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numbers
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number
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 of elderly
people
?
Firstly
, government or investors should open more nursing house, for reason that many elderly
people
does
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do
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 not have relatives
beside
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apply
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. To conclude, I would reiterate, that our
society
 should help elderly
people
. which are not able to help
theirselves
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themselves
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