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Tests and examinations are central feature of school systems in many countries. Do you think the educational benefits of testing overweigh any disadvantages?

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Over the
last
 few decades, there has been significant development in the educational
system
. In most
countries
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 we can find an effective educational
system
 that emphasizes
on
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various assessment methods to evaluate the student's knowledge. In my
perception
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 the pros brought by tests outweigh the cons. The main benefit is that the
students
 acquire knowledge on various aspects by the end of their curriculum.
Hence
, tests and examinations are performed quarterly and yearly to check the level of information they have managed to learn from the lecture classes.
Thus
, the teachers evaluate how effective the teaching methods are on
students
.
This
also
 helps the teachers to identify the weak
students
 and concentrate on them more. The significant negative impact of educational testing is the stress that they face in order to accomplish their goal. In
early
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 days, we could find most
students
 fall into unhealthy lifestyles like the habit of smoking as they find it difficult to cope with the stress they receive from the educational
system
 as well as from parents. As years
passed
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, it is observed that
students
 find it less stressful as they have
a
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 improved and developed educational
system
 and
well educated
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 parents who are caring and understanding. As we say, knowledge always has a beginning and no end. In my
opinion
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 educational testing should be improvised yearly in a manner that
it
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should be beneficial to
students
 rather than adversely affecting them. Education is the backbone of a society.
Therefore
, efforts should be made to improve the quality of education.
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