Investment in local amenities such as leisure centres is the best way for the government to foster a good community spirit. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

People
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into
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of entertainment
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or they should be better used to improve
health
education and transportation systems.
Although
there are really severe debates, personally, I believe that happiness is
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key element of our
health
and all societies must provide
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for sparing. At the outset, the main goal of our lives is being happy, and it is involved
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having good moments with our friends and beloved ones. Unfortunately, there are a lot of
people
who
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have opportunities to go to different
museums
, art galleries or even practice sports, due to money issues., so in my opinion, it is not fair to be limited and lead unhappy
life
just because one was born in a social unfavorable environment. S we all have
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for
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a good
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future.
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, countries
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, where art galleries and museums are free,
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museums
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the best places for living. My hometown, Saint-Petersburg
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to be
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a museum city, and every museum has its day when the entrance is free of charge, and those days the
museums
are full of
people
. It makes my heart smile because it shows that
people
are still interested in culture and art, and they enjoy every moment they can to be part of it. There are many cultural festivals that are totally free and subsidized by my city’s governor, some theatres have
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“happy hour” when spectators have a chance to get a discount entrance. All these kinds of things give
people
a chance to lead
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and more interesting way of
life
.
On the other hand
, there are other measures that could allow individuals to afford happiness on their own. In cities where the social wealth gap is smaller, city dwellers could be glad
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salaries, so the government funds for schooling or
health
could
also
foster a great spirit around.
For instance
, Colombia does not provide free
parks
or
museums
,
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don’t have enough money for paying themselves, so in many
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those
parks
are being attended just by tourists.
As a result
, poor Colombians are leading a very boring way of
life
. Germany does not have
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parks
either while Germans have enough money to pay for themselves.
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,
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recent research has shown that responders would go to the
parks
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basis if they were free of charge.
Consequently
, education and healthcare funds are very important but can’t replace leisure ones. In conclusion, relaxing,
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around is extremely important and our states should spend our
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in
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that kind of leisure.
Nevertheless
, other aspects of
life
like education and
health
are vital and of extreme importance, but
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leisure is
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root of everything, as I have already said.
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  • foster
  • ammunities
  • leisure centre
  • sense of togetherness
  • boost the local economy
  • inclusive events
  • diverse range
  • instil a sense of pride
  • shared identity
  • accessibility and connectivity
  • public green spaces
  • community bonding
  • frequent community service projects
  • community-based educational programs
  • promotes physical health
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