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One of the most important issues facing the world today is a shortage of food and some think genetically modified food is a possible solution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?.

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Malnutrition
due to
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 starvation is the biggest issue worldwide, particularly in developing nations. It is considered by some
people
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 that
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 problem can be overcome by altering production using genetic techniques. I strongly agree with the above view as I think
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 is the only way to boost crop yield, which can satisfy the growing population's
food
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 requirement. The opposer to
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 view might point out other solutions to the foodstuff shortage like reduction of meat wastage.
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 could help to feed a number of poor
people
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 who would not afford to buy
food
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otherwise
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, but
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 approach might be difficult to implement as it will need a lot of behaviour modification on an individual level;
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,
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 solution requires several earlier steps: prepares in low quantity, preserving unused
food
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, donating to the organisation, and redistribution to needy. Another concern might be raised by some
people
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 is that the possible harmful effects
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 may cause upon the consumption of
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food
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 on the human race. Mutating or introducing some genes of seeds does not mean that the future crop will possess deteriorating properties; To illustrate, a gala variety of apples gives more apples without causing any negative effects on its consumers. One of the major reasons why hybrid
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 is the definitive way to tackle the
food
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 shortage is that it can enhance crop yield dramatically.
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 is the root cause of ongoing starvation.
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, producing a greater amount of grains and vegetables could alleviate the situation of meal shortage.
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, a genetic mutation in peas can result in a 50 per cent higher harvest.
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, genetics
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 enables us to have a shorter harvesting period without compromising quality.
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, farmers can harvest it earlier and
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have an additional farming season, which would result in a higher amount of total production in a defined period. In conclusion,
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 some
people
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 might be worried about the use of genes to tackle the lack of
food
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 in many parts of the world, I strongly believe that
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 is the best way to produce more
food
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.
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 can solve the hunger problem by supplying
food
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 to the ever-growing human population in today's world.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • shortage
  • genetically modified
  • crop yields
  • wastage
  • resistant
  • pests
  • diseases
  • potential health risks
  • biodiversity
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