Write about the following topic: Some people think that studying history is a waste of time while others think it is essential to learn history. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays, in
this
modern era education Play important role in human life.
History
subject
show
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the details of
the
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freedom fighter and
nation
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history
it
important
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children
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should learn it. While, some
people
believe that it is
waste
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a waste
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of
the
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time
they can learn another
subject
like
,
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science and computer that
i
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will discuss
the
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both views in
further
paragraphs. On the one hand, India is a very large country there are many different kinds of
the
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people
live
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in
nation
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the nation
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. There are belong to insignificant region and caste they can follow only
own
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their own
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region and caste activity
history
subject
also
show the reality of
region
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the region
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.
Moreover
,
Indian
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Indians
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had been a slave
in
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200 years under the British government and there
are
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a
lot
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freedom fighter Play role in
freedom
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the freedom
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for
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of
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country
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the country
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,
for example
, Mohan Das
karam
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Karam
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chand
gandhi
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Gandhi
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and Shid bhagat
singh
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Singh
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history
also
belong to these
people
should follow their way.
On the other hand
, some
individual
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individuals
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think that
history
is a waste of the
time
because in
modern
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a modern
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generation there are many kinds of
subject
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subjects
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.
School
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Schools
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and
university
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universities
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should teach only science and computer
subject
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subjects
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because these are important for the future.
Evenmore
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Even more
,
people
think that
history
have not
value
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a value
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able
subject
rather than others and it is
waste
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a waste
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of
the
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time
because
children
spend most of
the
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study
time
spend on
learn
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learning
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their
history
.
for example
, a survey conducted by BBC news channel
it
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showed that Japan remove their
history
subject
in school and university
children
get more marks in each
subject
. In my opinion,
History
is important for
children
but they should less
time
spend on the historical rather than
others
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on others
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. They can learn science and computer
subject
because it is more valuable for the future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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