IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 6

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Disccuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #situation #job #shortage #money #situations #disccuss
Most
people
 feel in life at some point they desire suitable salaries, lifestyles and situations. Most of the time
people
 accepted their situation as luck. That's, types of
people
 come from middle-class categories.
For instance
, a person faced lots of experiences and cries best thing is how to deal with a
problem
 that sprits. When the environment cries challenges humans like Covid-19.
People
 dealing multiple needs and standard out their self.
Besides
,
people
 who are faced with a situation need to understand how to deal and the
first
 steps are important. Most of the folks accepted their corn
work
 harder for their future and what they want to be. From my point of view, measure the
problem
 and stick to your
problem
 and
work
 for it. Most
people
 don't
work
 on their weaknesses and complain about their problems
such
 as dissatisfaction with positions and salaries. Due to lack of skills and abilities ,not appropriate handsome salaries and lifestyles.
People
 are not working
work
 probably for the self they wanted instant results.
To begin
 ,with
work
 for yourself take time to achieve merit.
People
 did not know how self-development contributes to their lives.
Furthermore
,
people
 who easiest give up their tasks and do not handle
work
 or family load. If
people
 are households need proper management of money. And what thing and person what need for standout and improve investment.
For instance
,
people
 are started working at a start-up company need instant results impatient
people
 are progressing in life from my point of view.
People
 need to look awareness of situations stand and weaknesses and how to deal with problems most national
people
 not knew about and suggest reading some on
work
-life balance with money management. But
people
 are searching for those who have already faced
this
 type of
problem
 they guide is incredible.
Submitted by soelwin884884 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: