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Some people believe that it is good to share as much info as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Other, believe that some information is too important or valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both views and give opinions.

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It is rightly said that Knowledge is enhanced through sharing. Most of us believe that everyone should have a fair idea about the scientific research being conducted around the world and wants to get familiar with the economical aspects and educational health of a country.
On the other hand
, others are of the view that
information
 should be assessed before sharing with the public.
This
 essay will discuss both the perspectives and opine on an ideal way of sharing
information
. In today’s competitive environment everyone wants to excel and have access to various sources of
information
. Technology has paved the way for the development of relationships across the economy. At a click of a button, a common man has access to
news
 around the world with the help of the internet. I believe that sharing
information
 related to scientists' accomplishments, business ventures and changes in study structure is beneficial for society as
this
 will help them understand the growth prospects of their nation.
For example
: the Recent launch of INS Vikrant has made every Indian proud and provided a sense of contentment in their hearts.
On the contrary
, the government and
news
 channels have to be extra cautious before sharing any valuable
information
 with the general public.
For instance
, removing pass percentages and applying a grading system for Grade X students was informed at the beginning of the session due to which students didn’t take their studies seriously in the year of implementation. The scheme should not have become part of the
news
 at an early stage rather it should be told to the students once their syllabus was completed. In the light of the above facts, I would urge the media, publishers and government that each piece of
information
 should be evaluated properly before releasing to a wider group of people as each piece of
news
 is important and valuable and any wrong idea may harm the communities and nations across the world.
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