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In education or employment, some people work harder than others. What are the reasons for this? Does hard work always lead to success?

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We can observe that a group of
people
 always
work
 with great exertion in education life or in employment. I think that working hard is the key to the success, nothing is easy. But it has
also
 the norm, overworking can have some undesirable effects on health. Family can be one of the reasons for overworking because
employee
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the employee
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 is the one who can
work
 and should provide his or her family with the needs of life
such
 as daily food, shelter or study.
This
 situation forces them to
work
 hard and
to
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maintain their family life. As the prices go up day by day, it makes
such
 a big deal for
people
 who provide
their
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family
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families
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 on their own. Some
people
 have big
goals
. In order to reach difficult
goals
 rapidly, they
work
 without stopping. In
this
 way, they can climb a ladder fast and attain higher rankings in the
first
 rows. These big
goals
 can be a
master
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 degree in a well-known university or getting a promotion in their job. The
third
 group of
people
work
 harder, simply,
they
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because they
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 have no reason, and they are workaholics. These kinds of
people
loves
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 their jobs or studies without any reason. As I mentioned before, working hard is the key to the success, but it is not the only factor, in my opinion. You should have a plan and discipline for your
work
 which will make things affordable.
Additionally
, health is
also
 should be alongside your dreams. Overworking which can ruin your health will not be
worthy
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in
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 the future, even if you have been successful. In conclusion, hard
work
 will lead you to a successful milestone if you take care of yourself.
Then
 reaching
goals
 will let you enjoy
of
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