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Globalization is positive for economies, but its negative sides should not be ignored. To What extents do you agree or disagree?

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The maps illustrate how much a university has improved from 2010 to now. Overall, it is
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 that some departments has been became larger and taller buildings than previous ones over the years. Student accommodation was on the left of the main road where the lake was across in 2010. After twelve-year later, it has been stayed the same and
then
 increased to another tall one beside.
Furthermore
, it has been
also
 built the
third
 one where the previous shops have been turned, which is added a new road
next
 to it. A teaching block was on the right of the lake in 2010;
however
,
this
 block has been replaced with an independent arts building, while the science building has taken the place of the university officials. A short student dormitory was
next
 to the intersection in the past, whereas it has been superseded by student facilities, including shops, an office, and so on. It is worth noting that in the middle was a lake with lawn and seating chairs around, but the grass and the chairs have been gone presently.
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