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2- Plastic shopping bags contribute to the pollution of land and sea, some think they should be banned. Do you agree or disagree?

#plastic #bags #pollution #land #sea #think
It is argued that
plastic
 shopping
bags
 are responsible for a variety of environmental problems, so
it
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they
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 should be prohibited. While I agree that
plastic
bags
 have
cause
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caused
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 lots of issues, I believe that
it
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they
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 still
have
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positive
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 role in daily life. On the one hand,
plastic
bags
, these days,
is
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are
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 produced with a massive product and become more and more harmful to
our
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apply
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nature
especially
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,especially
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 our land and sea.
For example
,
a
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apply
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common
plastic
bags
 need about one million to decompose,
therefore
,
land sea
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land-sea
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 creatures can easily eat
these poisonous thing
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this poisonous thing
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. The reason for
this
 is that animals often confuse the
bags
 for food and
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consume
comsume
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consume
 them,
then
blocking
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block
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 their digestive processes.
Moreover
, It
is require
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vast
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of
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space to
dispose
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ofdispose
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 all the waste
of
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in
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 plastics bag because
it
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isit
wasit
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 hard to recycle.As a
results
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result
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 when you try to burn
plastic
bags
,
it
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they
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release
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releases
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 toxic
subtance
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substance
substances
 into the air causing ambient air pollution.
On the other hand
, despite all the negative
effect
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effects
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 on
environment
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the environment
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,
plastic
bags
 still play a vital role in
industrial
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industry
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 and
economy
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the economy
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.
Plastic
bags
 are
light-weight
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lightweight
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, so it requires less energy to
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be transported
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transported
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transport
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 and distributed. While paper
bags
 need more material to produce,
plastic
bags
 have a low-priced to
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manufacturing
manufaturing
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manufacturing
 and can
be use
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 so many
time
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times
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 because of
its
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durable
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. It is
also
 water-proofed,
as a result
 of
this
 it will protect
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whatever
whenever
whever
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wherever
 you put
in
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it in
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.
Plastic
bags
is
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are
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 very useful and convenient as you can wrap them around your food products to store your food for a longer time. In conclusion, it
seem
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 to me that it would be wrong to ban
plastic
bags
 regardless
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of it
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it
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their
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 effect
to
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on
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environment
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the environment
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. I do not believe that the drawback of using
plastic
bags
 can outweigh
it
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its
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 advantages
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