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An English-speaking friend wants to spend a two-week holiday in your region and has written asking for information and advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, offer to find somewhere to stay give advice about what to do give information about what clothes to bring

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Dear Anna, I am writing
this
 letter on the behalf of your request for your way of finding a place to stay around my area for a couple of weeks. There are several best places nearby my home to spend your holidays. But I would recommend you to stay
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downtown as the rent is affordable out there
also
 there are many recreational places for you to enjoy your leisure time in the evening
such
 as parks, a Tennis playground and so on. During your two weeks, you can visit several places which seem very attractive to tourists.
firstly
, Bramalea City Center, a huge shopping mall consisting of several expensive brand stores for clothing and footwear
such
 as H&M, Forever, and so on as well as food areas from different parts of the world.
Secondly
, there is the museum which does not include
high
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 cost and includes various amazing
artifacts
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 to admire. Before Visiting
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 would like to give you very significant advice as you are coming
on
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 December which is
very
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 coldest month
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 would recommend you
to
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bring
bunch
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 of
some
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warm
cloths
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 to
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keep
kepp
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keep
 you warm as during that time the
Apparels
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 are very expensive to buy at that time. I am looking forward to
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 you! Yours Lovingly, Jessica
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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