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Some school children buy healthy food from the school cafeteria. However, some buy unhealthy food. What are the reasons for both these situations? Should schools be allowed to sell unhealthy food?

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Undeniably, both women and men are becoming more competitive in
this
 modern world. A woman can do almost everything a man can do and vice versa.
Although
 both genders have their strengths and weaknesses, I believe they have the right to choose a professional career, and we do not have any right to exclude them from some jobs.
To begin
 with, every individual on
this
 planet has the lawful right to select a profession and is mature enough to make
this
 decision for themselves. So who are we to exclude them from certain domains? If we are doing
this
, we are promoting unethical discrimination.
Also
, I completely agree that some types of work are
unfavorable
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 to a specific gender;
for example
, a woman might be unable to perform heavy lifting jobs, which does not mean that we should exclude her from
this
 profession. It is their choice; maybe some women are passionate about
this
 job and strong enough to carry the heavy load.
Therefore
, we must not exclude certain professions due to their gender.
Furthermore
, there is ample amount of evidence that proves that both genders are capable enough to do the majority of work. But unfortunately, women had to suffer discrimination due to gender, not only in their profession but
also
 in their studies.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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