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People living in the twenty-first century are happier than people of previous times. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Humans living in the current century are more blessed than
people
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 of previous centuries. I agree with
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 view to some extent so that nowadays individuals are living among lots of comforts and chances
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 there are disadvantages of twenty-
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-century life as well. I'll discuss these views in the following paragraphs. On the one hand, most of humanity is living in good conditions with more comforts than
people
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 who lived in the past. Indeed, the standard of
people
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's lives has improved by overwhelming opportunities to live, travel, and work.
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, inventing and developing new technologies made humans' life easier. Now, individuals can communicate with each other within a few seconds by using telephones, even they can see their loved ones who are in the other part of the world via video calls. Most countries are organizing free schools. That's why everyone can study, even students who can't afford tuition fees.
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, to my mind, there are a lot of troubles in
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 century,
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 as global warming, the rise of sea level, epidemics, and pandemics like covid-19. Nowadays, most of the world's population, especially Africans suffering a lack of pure water.
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, they have to drink polluted water, which causes the spreading of different diseases among
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. As an example, ongoing terroristic forces are in the territory of Syria and Afghanistan forcing the population to experience hard times still. In conclusion, we can say that there are so many opportunities and luxuries available to
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 and modern technologies cover our surroundings nowadays
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 living in the present has its challenges as well.
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