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Plastic bags are used widely and cause many environmental problems. Some people say they should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#plastic #bags #people
In our modern
life
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the
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poly
bags
 became
as
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one of the important recourse and solve the
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surrounding
surroundigal
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surrounding
 issues,
however
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 the majority of
people
 claim that
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carrier
bags
 should be prohibited. From my point of
view
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 the
second
 way is more significant and in
this
essay
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 I will discuss these two viewpoints in a depth. On the one hand
plastic
bags
 are popular because of their low cost and comfortable to hold and
this
 type of
bags
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bag
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are
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using
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used
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 almost all over the world. Individuals started
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use
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 it
,
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because carrier
bags
 are available everywhere.
However
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the
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a
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 number of
people
are not agree
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are not agreeing
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 with
this
 because there is more
demage
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damage
 rather than benefits.
For
example
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 after using
plastic
bags
people
use
 to throw
it
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them
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 everywhere. By the
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enlarging
inlarging
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 the size of garbage humans started to catch away
them
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to
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into
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 oceans and in
this
way
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 it
effects
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affects
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to
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the
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nature too. In
fact
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 by the year the 19
procents
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per cent
percents
 of ocean fishes are
killing
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killed
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 by the pollution of water.
Despide
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Despite
 of pollution,
the
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most individuals
wants
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want
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 to
use
usual
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the usual
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 or paper
bags
, because they are
more
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preferable and
people
able
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are able
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 to
use
it
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them
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 a lot.
By
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 the industrialization of our
world
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 the economy chose to
use
 the usual
plastic
bags
 as a cheap way of big income and
that is
 why we prefer to execute poly
bags
 but if we will change our
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choice
choise
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choice
 suddenly by
the
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using paper or grid
bags
, it could change almost everything in pollution line. In conclusion, during the
use
 and wraps of
plastic
bags
, we must
first
 think about dying animals in the sea, and of course about
alife
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life
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 nature too.
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