Some say you should always marry for love, others say that in an uncertain world, it is wiser to marry for money. Discuss bith views and give your opinion.

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in
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human
life
. Many people held that we should marry
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love
while, others argue that we should marry for
money
.
This
essay will discuss both these points of view and argue in favour of the latter. On the
one
hand,
love
marriages are highly successful as couples do understand each other. In
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, in any difficulty of
life
,
love
we help them work together against
this
situation and find a solution.
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long lasting
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marriages
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through the years due to the amount of
love
they
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towards each other.
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, in
love
marriages, we have the ability to choose the most compatible partner. To put it differently, a compatible partner means
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arguments with each other and
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goal in
life
.
On the other hand
,
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for
money
give financial security. To put it simply, we will never have to worry about
money
in our
life
.
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, many women tend to become a stay at
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wife
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as their spouses make enough
money
to take care of the family. Their children have the best education.
Also
,
money
means power in our modern society.
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, people respect the wealthy person more than the poor
one
.
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, a poor family member that no
one
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differently once he
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to become wealthy. To conclude, I believe that a combination of
love
and
money
leads to a happy and successful marriage.
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