In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is, therefore, necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. Do you agree or disagree?

Food
is an important part of an individual's life and it helps one's body to keep moving
through out
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the day.
Hoewver
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However
, it has been observed that certain parts of the world are facing problems
due to
heavy
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consumption of junk
food
. There is a school of thought
who
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believes that
government
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the government
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should increase the taxes for
this
kind of edibles. I completely agree, with
this
point of view and
this
essay will elaborate upon ideas in favour of my belief.
To begin
with, an increase in tariff will result in an inclination of the
overall
price of the product. With an unstable economy in the current scenario, folks who can barely afford
buying
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street
food
will start putting a
full-stop
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on
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their trend of purchasing fast
food
daily. Australia is a prime example of
this
pattern, locals who were buying unhealthy
food
before have started opting for organic
food
as
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there is hardly any difference seen in the prices.
This
step will make people aware
about
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their eating habits and will lead a nation towards a healthier environment.
In addition
, by charging more tolls on unhealthier products, management can use
this
extra money
in curing
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the patients who are at present a victim of
health related
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problems and
also
in organizing
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campaigns and awareness programs in the localities which are affected most. To cite an instance,
United
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Kingdom after collecting tolls on the
unhealhy
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unhealthy
items developed a separate team which
are
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invited by the local
highschools
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high schools
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during their parent's teacher meetings to inform about the disadvantages of not eating good
food
, to the guardians and the children. To
conculde
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conclude
, a raise in junk
food
taxes will help in an increment in the treasure of the government bank which will be used for
public's
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betterment.
Moreover
, it will
also
help
public
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the public
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to choose a superior
food
product.
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