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In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is, therefore, necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. Do you agree or disagree?

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Food
 is an important part of an individual's life and it helps one's body to keep moving
through out
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 the day.
Hoewver
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However
, it has been observed that certain parts of the world are facing problems
due to
heavy
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 consumption of junk
food
. There is a school of thought
who
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 believes that
government
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the government
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 should increase the taxes for
this
 kind of edibles. I completely agree, with
this
 point of view and
this
 essay will elaborate upon ideas in favour of my belief.
To begin
 with, an increase in tariff will result in an inclination of the
overall
 price of the product. With an unstable economy in the current scenario, folks who can barely afford
buying
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to buy
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 street
food
 will start putting a
full-stop
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full stop
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on
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to
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 their trend of purchasing fast
food
 daily. Australia is a prime example of
this
 pattern, locals who were buying unhealthy
food
 before have started opting for organic
food
 as
the
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apply
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there is hardly any difference seen in the prices.
This
 step will make people aware
about
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of
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 their eating habits and will lead a nation towards a healthier environment.
In addition
, by charging more tolls on unhealthier products, management can use
this
 extra money
in curing
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to cure
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 the patients who are at present a victim of
health related
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health-related
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 problems and
also
in organizing
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to organize
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 campaigns and awareness programs in the localities which are affected most. To cite an instance,
United
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the United
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 Kingdom after collecting tolls on the
unhealhy
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unhealthy
 items developed a separate team which
are
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is
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 invited by the local
highschools
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high schools
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 during their parent's teacher meetings to inform about the disadvantages of not eating good
food
, to the guardians and the children. To
conculde
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conclude
, a raise in junk
food
 taxes will help in an increment in the treasure of the government bank which will be used for
public's
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 betterment.
Moreover
, it will
also
 help
public
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the public
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 to choose a superior
food
 product.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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