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Plastic bags are use widely and cause many environmental problems. Some people say they should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In today’s modern life the ecological crisis in which humanity is barely surviving has become a major concern.
Thus
 a part of the population believes that a measure to reduce
this
 crisis is to prohibit
plastic
 shopping
bags
.
Personally
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 I completely agree with
this
 statement, I believe that there are other ways to improve
this
 situation. On the one hand
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we have only one planet to live on and we must protect it. We don’t only keep safe the planet, we look after everything on it water, animals, nature and many other things. Some people just throw away the elastic to nature causing harm not only, in the sight but
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 the animals and plants. Most of the earth’s surface is covered with water and when it’s windy,
plastic
bags
 fly into the water and harm aquatic animals
therefore
 banning these
bags
 is vital to their survival.
On the other hand
 from my perspective and experience banning
bags
 is a temporary and necessary solution. It does not indicate the ecological dead end we live in
consequently
, with the support of
government
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 out to informed that prevention of the greenhouse effect and deforestation are among the main problems.
Thus
 with these actions and the ban
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an
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plastic
bags
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 many
environment
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 problems will be reduced. In a
nutshell
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 we live on a destroyed planet, even if it is beyond our power to change it. The
prohibit
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 of
plastic
bags
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wit
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 a targeted education about the environment will soon prevent the detriment future of our kind.
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