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The best way to make the road transport of goods safer is to ask drivers to take a driving test each year. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#road #transport #goods #drivers #test #year
Nowadays,yearly driving
test
 by
the
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transporters is considered to be the greatest measure of ensuring safe transport of commodities on land.I strongly disagree with
this
 notion because factors
such
 as
the
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road condition contribute significantly to the outcome of land transport.
This
 essay will discuss my point of
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.
To begin
 with, about 70%-80% of the success of road transportation is attributed to the
state
 of the roads. Good tarred pathways that do not have potholes
makes
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 the movement of commodities by vehicle easy and comfortable because the driver would not carry out wrong driving practices
such
 as sudden pedal match on
break
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brake
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 pads and change of gears.
For example
,adequate roads
makes
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 the transporters
to
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drive at a good speed with
good
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 application of driving patterns.
Furthermore
, the
state
 of health of the person conveying the goods is essential for safety to be achieved.
This
 is because
drowsy
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state
 following excess intake of alcohol or deprivation of sleep results in accidents.
Thus
, the assessment of these factors
are
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 paramount in ensuring success while conveying goods on land. I strongly disagree with
this
 notion because
driving
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test
 is not a true means of assessment. It is affected by factors
such
 as
state
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the state
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 of the car.Since the
test
 is done using new brands of cars that are not utilized during the transport of materials.
For instance
,
a
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recent research showed that 30% of
motor-bike
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 collision was caused by drivers that were examined by drivers'
test
 only. In conclusion,
although
driving
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test
 is the most recommended way of
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assessing
assesing
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assessing
 safety on the highway, I strongly disagree with
this
 notion because it lacks credibility
thus
 better measures like assessing the
state
 of the pathways and
health
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the health
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 of the driver should be encouraged.
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