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Writing Topic 2- Shops should give preference in selling local food rather than imported food. Do you agree or disagree?

#topic #shops #food
Different types of
food
 stores sell their own national or area
food
 while some tend to try outside
food
thus
 wanting international cuisine. while I believe it should depend on the customer's requirement
hence
, probably disagree with the primary statement. To commence with, traditional shops always make a priority of the feed from their area as it could lead the awareness of different spices and dishes of national cuisine among coming generations.
Besides
this
, if citizens of a particular country would eat their own
food
then
 obviously would attract more international
customers
 resulting in the promotion of the country, shop and meal all around the world.
For example
, In the Delhi market whenever a foreigner came tried the local
food
 and praises its taste it
results
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 grabs more
customers
 internationally.
On the other hand
, Despite of benefits of local
food
 the youngsters and adults run for everything new because of their taste they prefer outside
food
 so, they can come to know the culture and edible things around that particular country and
also
 could result in enhancement of their knowledge. Apart from it, more earnings can be done some outsider
food
 is more expensive than local
food
. In my opinion, selling
food
 is not a big issue either nationally or internationally as just requires the attention of
customers
 from all around the world.
Thus
 the sale only depends on the type of
customers
 and the market demand To conclude,
Food
 is an inevitable thing for a person to live. Shops should have both options in the sale of
food
 as
customers
 always look for variety.
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