PART 1: You read an article in a magazine about your hometown and some of the information was wrong. Write to the editor to correct the article and tell him how unhappy you are.

Dear sir or Madam, Good morning, I hope you are doing well. I am writing to you to inform you about some wrong information that you wrote in the Monthly magazine on 13 Sep about my
city
Dammam
.
First
of all your article is my favourite and I have membership in
this
magazine. I noticed three wrong points in your article
firstly
,
Dammam
is not the big
city
in Saudia Arabia the big
city
is Riyadh.
Secondly
, It has the tallest beach in the world ,not the
third
tallest. And the
third
point is
Dammam
contains a diversity of people not only eastern people. I encourage you to read more about my home town. And I can send you a book that has a lot of information and details about my
city
not only
Dammam
but other big cities of Saudia Arabia it is called the green book or you can find it at king Fahad bookstore. I hope you accept my notice and you have apologised in your
next
article. Faithfully, Saud
Submitted by saud9928 on

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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