In many parts of the world, there is continuous coverage of sport on television. Some people believe this discourages the young from taking part in any sport themselves. Discuss this view and give your own opinion. You should write at least 250 words.

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essay will be discussed the statement that the non-stop broadcast of

sports

on television

dismotivates

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demotivates

/demotivates the new generation to participate in playing themselves and at the end, I will add my personal view on the topic

that is

the opposite. In many parts of the world watching television is one of the most common ways of entertainment, especially gathering with friends for a special match of any sport

that is

considered

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important to fans.

However

, it might be becoming a very controversial way of looking at

sports

-something to watch, not to play. Some believe that it is due to laziness and boredom.

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, my grandpa watches tennis matches daily,

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he does not know even how to play it in the

first

place.

Moreover

, I have a different view. My contrasting opinion is that especially young people about young generation get even more motivated by the

sports

channels because they get used to that sport a lot and it becomes as a passion

being

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a part of it.

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my ex-boyfriend

who

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loves various types of

sports

. Some of them are

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traditional soccer and tennis. He could not miss a match thereby that started

which started an obsession for him

practicing

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and playing with friends the same

sports

he watches every day. The

second

reason is the advertisement of famous players to the teenage public

audience who is a lot more influenced by

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social

medias

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media and new trends. What I mean is that if a boy has a role model

such

as Lebron James or Messi, we would want to become as successful as

this

highly-paid sportiest. Another example is my little cousin who was a big fan of Christiano Ronaldo. His parents bought him t-shirts and other presents with Ronaldo’s face on, thereby he started going to soccer practices and hasn’t

has not stopped for six years. To conclude,/In conclusion

To sum up the continuous coverage of sport on TV leads to

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laziness

laziness towards being active. Alternatively, my way of thinking/ I

consider

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my personal view

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that

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it has an opposite effect on kids and encourages them even more.

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