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The maps below show the changes in the art gallery ground floor in 2015 and present day

The maps below show the changes in the art gallery ground floor in 2015 and present day
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There are some changes in the art
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gallery
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 ground floor in 2015 and the present day, but some of the rooms are still the same. The entrance, the
Exhibition
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Room
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 1/2/3 hasn’t changed and it remains even now. Standing at the entrance, on the left
side
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 you can see that
exhibition
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room
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 4 has been separated into 2 rooms, from
exhibition
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room
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 4 to the Children’s area and Temporary
Exhibition
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. The
Gallery
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 Office used to be next to
exhibition
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room
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 4 but now it’s just an empty space with a vending machine. There was a receptionist next to the
gallery
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 office but now they have moved it
side
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 by
side
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the
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 fucking Temporary
Exhibition
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room
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 (what a fucking idiot). The
gallery
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 shop was a café
room
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 back
then
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, they changed it and made it smaller than before. The stairs were moved to the right
side
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 and they built a lift next to the stairs and
exhibition
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room
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words gallery, exhibition, room, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 2 times.
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