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Covid-19 may be a catastrophe for human beings, but a therapy for Mother Nature. Discuss both views and give your own opinions.

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Nowadays,in
this
 high-tech era pollution of the earth dramatically increased it create a lot of
isse
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issue
 for nature. While
,
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 during the corona period all transportation and industry have been closed and it is beneficial for nature. Due to the diversity of ,
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viewpoint
this
 phenomenon has interpreted variables I shed light on my views in upcoming paragraphs. On the one hand, during the coronavirus , the time it was created numerous kinds of difficulties for humans begins. The nation's economy has been closed people were stuck in homes they did not go anywhere.
Moreover
, they lose their jobs and business.
Covid
-19 provide
also
 provides
the
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 pessimistic effect on children's studies they can not attend their classes at school.it increased unemployment people face financial problems. According to the study, the unemployment of the nation has 40% increased after the
covid
 time.
On the other hand
, the
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corona virus
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 has been beneficial for
humor
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it
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 decreased the
infection
 in the environment.
such
 as
,
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 noise and air. During the
covid
 point individuals work there ,online
it
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 decreased the traffic connection. Even more, most of the
infection
 made by industries and traffic and
covid
 stage it was closed and
reduce
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air
infection
.
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, a survey conducted by BBC news channel showed that during the
covid
 era earth
infection
 has 50% low and increased the
birds
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 species. In my opinion,during the
covid
 , the era it was rose unemployment. But, it has been beneficial for quality the government should make new rules regarding saving water and air pollution.
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