Everyone should stay at school until 18. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some people think that all

children

should stay at

school

until the

age

of

eighteen

.

Although

staying at

school

until adulthood can produce a

number

benefits

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, I personally disagree with

this

idea

for a

number

of reasons, which will be outlined in

this

essay. On the one hand, the

idea

that

children

should continue to study at

school

until the

age

of

eighteen

does have a

number

of benefits.

Firstly

, most young people under the

age

of

eighteen

have very little real-world experience and have very little

idea

of what career they will pursue, and

therefore

staying at

school

until the

age

of

eighteen

will allow them

further

opportunity to develop their education and time to decide upon a suitable career path.

Furthermore

, forcing

children

to stay at

school

until the

age

of

eighteen

will create a more educated future generation of people which may help to reduce some social and unemployment problems.

On the other hand

, there are

also

a

number

of drawbacks that

this

idea

may bring with it.

For instance

, many

children

these days do not

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with the current education system and forcing them to participate in

school

can cause many problems.

For example

, these kinds of students are usually very disruptive in a classroom and

this

affects other students who are trying to learn.

In addition

to

this

, many

children

choose to follow careers that do not require them to continue studying in

school

past the

age

of sixteen.

For example

, for those who wish to pursue a career that requires more

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learning,

such

as a qualified builder, electrician or machinery operator, it is quite unnecessary to remain at

school

until the

age

of

eighteen

. In conclusion,

although

there would be a

number

of positive effects from

children

remaining at

school

until a later

age

, I personally feel that the drawbacks outweigh the benefits mentioned above.