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People today find their live more and more dominated by their jobs. To what extend do you agree or disagree with the statement.

#people #jobs
Although
 the world has ample natural resources, nothing is free. Individual
life
 depends on their employment; how much
money
 they earn, how much
money
 they spend, and how much
money
 they save, which help them to survive in
this
 world, and
consequently
, their
work
 has more control over their
life
. I agree with the above statement because intense
work
 and healthy
life
 are interrelated. I elucidate my stand in the following paragraphs with some examples. To commence with, the
first
 and predominant reason to support
this
 concept is that to live a healthy lifestyle, you need a job.
Although
 not everybody is wealthy by birth, most
people
 have to
work
 hard to earn
money
 to fulfil their family's basic needs,
such
 as nutritious food, better education for children, future savings, etc.
Therefore
, their
work
life
 is a bit imbalanced.
Otherwise
, they will struggle. To exemplify, we can consider poor
people
 who have no income source and cannot even afford food for themselves.
Furthermore
, many
people
 want to live a luxurious
life
, and I think they must. But unfortunately, they are unable to due to their job limitation. So let me put it another way if
people
work
 40 hours a week to fulfil their basic needs, why should they not
work
 50 hours a week to enhance their living standards? In conclusion, I recapitulate that innumerable supporting arguments clearly indicate that
people
's lives are dominated by their
work
, not because they want to but to improve their standard of living.
Therefore
, I strongly agree with the presented statement.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Personal fulfillment
  • Unfulfilling job
  • Mental health
  • Physical health
  • Financial stability
  • Job security
  • Societal norms
  • Career choices
  • Pursuing passion
  • Practicality
  • Personal growth
  • Skill development
  • Self-esteem
  • Social status
  • Work-life balance
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