The charts below show information about the participants in the Olympics from 1924 to 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show information about the participants in the Olympics from 1924 to 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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participants who took part in the Olympics from 1924 to 2014.
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, the number of athletes entering the Olympics increased considerably since it began.
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, there were always more men than women,
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, the gap narrowed significantly as the
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of female participants throughout the years. To be specific, there were few women taking part in the game, yet in 1954, the bar of women athletes rose from 100 to 500.
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it stood at around 1800 in 1984 and
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to nearly 5000 in 2014.
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males was much higher, at 3000 in the first year and continued to increase, reaching
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peak of nearly 6000
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2014. In
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graph, approximately 3500 people participated in the first Olympics.
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number experienced a steady rise to around 6500 in 1984. The most dramatic increase occurred between 1984 and 2014 when it climbed by 5500, ending at less than 11500.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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