39. Societies that do not respect and honor their women can never make progress. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Nowadays, human
right
is important things that every
countries
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country

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should have in basic life. One of them is
the
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apply

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women
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women's

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right
that
still
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are still

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in progress
to
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apply

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development. Actually,
this
right
should be
has
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had

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in over the world, but some countries still unadmit it example in some
tradiotional
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traditional

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,
women
should work at home or be
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a housewife

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housewife
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housewives

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instead
of
take
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taking

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care of the family. In
this
part should be
men
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men's

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duty to do.
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I'm
In

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Im
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In

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my inspective, I totally agree
for
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with

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the topic
then
for
this
essay, I will elaborate
the
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on the

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reason that I agree in the
next
paragraph.  Previously,
women
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women's

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duty is
take
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to take
taking

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care of kids,
doing
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do

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housework and even
no
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having no

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need to
studying
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study

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.
Despite
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thisDespite

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, studying is an
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important

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impotant
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important

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things
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thing

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for all gender. Everybody should get a good education
for
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to

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live
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a live

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life.
Moreover
, some traditional take care
their
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of their

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daughter

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daugther
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daughter

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less than their son because their son will get a good job in the future but their
dauhther
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daughter

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has just married
with
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apply

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another son's family. For
this
reason
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,reason

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does not fair for her just because they are girls. Recently,
people
try to push
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for women

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women
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women's

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right
to
admittedly
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be admittedly

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in the world.
Because of human
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Human

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right
is the basic things that
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a national

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national
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nation

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should has since
their
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its

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born. It
is not depend
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does not depend

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on what is your gender, or it calls 'equality'.
Thus
, if
the
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apply

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society
do
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does

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not have equality, it means you are an old
fasion
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fashion

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and in society does not
development
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develop

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at all. In conclusion, equality of gender
right
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rights

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ahould
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shoulder
should

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has
admit
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admitted

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in many
country
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countries

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. Sex does not an
indecator
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indicator

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,
what
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of what

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you can do or you cannot do.
people
should respect
to
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apply

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another
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other

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people
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because

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becauce
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because

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it is a basic manner that
people
should have since we
born
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are born

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