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Many people today find it difficult to balance the demands of their work and personal life. What are the causes of this situation, and what can individuals and employers do to reduce the problem? You should give reasons for your answer, and include ideas and examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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Lately, there is no time for individuals to enjoy their private lives, especially after the pandemic.In fact, they fail to maintain
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work-life
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 balance.
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 essay will mention some reasons and certain remedies for the same. The lines between job and life are gradually disappearing for a number of reasons,
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 as no set boundaries.
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employees
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 are made to
work
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 more than their actual
work
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hours
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 each day.
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,sometimes even on
weekends
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 their boss expects them to show up and wrap
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 pending tasks.
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, in order to save money, authorities higher
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 people because of which individuals are overburdened with daily tasks and duties.
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,
employees
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 are unable to spend time at home and cherish their private lives.
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, these issues can be addressed by adopting certain measures.
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,
the
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organisations should have strict policies concerning
the
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apply
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work
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hours
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.
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, the working
hours
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 must be set to 9-5 pm only and no one should exceed
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 limit.
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,communication with emails and phone calls should be discouraged on weekends and holidays.
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, the authorities should increase their workforce and
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 interns and more
employees
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.
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, the
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workload
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work load
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workload
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 will be distributed and there will be less tension and pressure among workers.
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, these solutions will
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 aid
employees
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 to focus on their relationships and personal goals. In conclusion, even though the workforce is struggling to live a peaceful life because of
work
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,
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 issue can be tackled easily.In
fact
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 certain remedies,
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 as rigid office
hours
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 and increased
employees
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 will help maintain an
equilibrilium
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equilibrium
.

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