Many people today find it difficult to balance the demands of their work and personal life. What are the causes of this situation, and what can individuals and employers do to reduce the problem? You should give reasons for your answer, and include ideas and examples from your own knowledge and experience.

Lately, there is no time for individuals to enjoy their private lives, especially after the pandemic.In fact, they fail to maintain
work-life
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a work-life

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balance.
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essay will mention some reasons and certain remedies for the same. The lines between job and life are gradually disappearing for a number of reasons,
such
as no set boundaries.
To begin
with,
employees
are made to
work
more than their actual
work
hours
each day.
For instance
,sometimes even on
weekends
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,weekends

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their boss expects them to show up and wrap
the
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up the

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pending tasks.
Moreover
, in order to save money, authorities higher
less
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fewer

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people because of which individuals are overburdened with daily tasks and duties.
As a result
,
employees
are unable to spend time at home and cherish their private lives.
However
, these issues can be addressed by adopting certain measures.
Firstly
,
the
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apply

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organisations should have strict policies concerning
the
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apply

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work
hours
.
For example
, the working
hours
must be set to 9-5 pm only and no one should exceed
this
limit.
Furthermore
,communication with emails and phone calls should be discouraged on weekends and holidays.
Additionally
, the authorities should increase their workforce and
higher
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hire

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interns and more
employees
.
Consequently
, the
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workload

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work load
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workload

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will be distributed and there will be less tension and pressure among workers.
Thus
, these solutions will
further
aid
employees
to focus on their relationships and personal goals. In conclusion, even though the workforce is struggling to live a peaceful life because of
work
,
this
issue can be tackled easily.In
fact
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certain remedies,
such
as rigid office
hours
and increased
employees
will help maintain an
equilibrilium
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equilibrium

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