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It is important fir people to take risks both in their professiol lives and personal lives Do write the advantages and outweigh the disadvantages

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Nowadays,
threat
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 is
a
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first
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 step toward
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individuals
individual
 success .It is effective
among
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for
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 young and mature
persons
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people
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 to take chance in their social
life
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 as well as in their personal
life
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 .
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 , some
stvata
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strata
state
 opposed that idea ۔While most of them agreed with
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 argument .
i
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 will discuss both advantages and
drawback
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 of
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 statement . To start with advantages , chances are very beneficiary for adults at
initial
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the initial
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 stage .To illustrate , possibility in student
life
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 like when they pass matric
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 they choose desired subjects for
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 study .
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 , aim
in
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 support healthy
life
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 but they
also
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 contribute
many
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 threats .
in addition
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 to that ,
life
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 without
aim
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 is like you
go
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going
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on
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to
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destination
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a destination
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 without
know
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knowing
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their
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its
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 paths . Goals
are play
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 a sufficient role in social
life
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 , because of hard work and
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possibility
possibilty
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the possibilty
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 they turn their dreams into reality
,
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 and became
succefull
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successful
 in
life
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 , steve jobs invest all of his money in
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iPhone
iphone
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an iphone
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 project .
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, after day and night work he and his colleagues became victorious
to
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in
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intoduce
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introduce
iphone
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iPhone
 devices for
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individuals
inviduals
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individuals
.Nowadays ,
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iPhone
iphone
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the iphone
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 is big fish and they launched new smartphones after every year .
similarly
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,
billgates
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bill gates
 put
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life
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their life
his life
her life
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in endanger
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endanger
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endangered
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 when he
leave
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the
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school and he
manufacture
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manufactures
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 a
microsoft
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Microsoft
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 . To outweigh
drawbacks
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the drawbacks
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 ,
possibility
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the possibility
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in
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of
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life
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 may cause
finincial
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financial
 loss , failures etc .Chances have many negative impacts
in
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on
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 daily
life
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 . At
start
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the start
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 ,
goal
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the goal
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 is a crucial for every probability .That,s why , when a goal is not set
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 nearly you cost your finance and
economic
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. Many companies lead
towad
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toward
 failure because they have immature
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employees
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employes
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employees
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 and
also
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 use their wealth
in
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on
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 impossible projects . In personal
life
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 , when a student
eager
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is eager
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 to run a
bussiness
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business
 after leaving
the
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school
then
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 they might fail in future because they no experienced about environment and calculation of a firm .
For Instance
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 , teenagers invest all of
his
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their
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 money in
a
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apply
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Bitcoin in 2014 . they get profit
in
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from
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this
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 coin and they became
addict
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addicted
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then
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, suddenly Bitcoin crashed in 2015 that why they
lead
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led
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toward
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to
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financial
finacial
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financial
 loss and hazard
of
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to
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life
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 . According to
report
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a report
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 published by the "Express" about 10 %
adults
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of adults
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 suicide because of their failure due to chances In conclusion , probability lead toward success by
inviduals
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individuals
 hard work and desired goal .
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Therefore
Therfore
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Therefore
, aim plays a good role when a teenager became prosperous .On contrary , experience is the only thing that matter in social
life
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then
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 you
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achieve
acheive
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achieve
 economic loss and fail in future .

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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