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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What sort of punishments should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children?

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In
this
 technological era,
computer
 skills are
essential
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 part of everyday life. In the early centuries, education was
consist
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 of reading, writing, and solving mathematical problems, but now computational techniques are
also
 important.
Therefore
, I agree with
this
 opinion and the following subsequent paragraphs will highlight my opinion with relevant examples.
To begin
 with, nowadays
internet
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the internet
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 and
computer
is
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 becoming popular the reason is that
this
 is the need of the day.
Further
, every country is developing by online methods of approach.
For instance
, there are many job opportunities for a person who is having knowledge about typing a d scanning.
Furthermore
, many people are doing online work from home with help of YouTube and websites.
Moreover
, in all educational institutions
computer
 is considered
as
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compulsory
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a compulsory
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 subject.
Therefore
, there are many
computer
 courses that
helps
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the
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students in their studies.
For example
, these days everyone is using
computer
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a computer
the computer
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 for searching their topic of study.
In addition
, for using
computer
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a computer
the computer
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 in an effective way one should be aware
about
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 how to use short keys and other features. In the conclusion,
computer
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the computer
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 is a basic need for study as well as for
job
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. So, I recommend
computer
 skills should be made as necessary
skill
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skills
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likewise
 reading, writing and mathematics.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • disciplinary methods
  • emotional well-being
  • positive reinforcement
  • moral reasoning
  • behavioral issues
  • non-punitive
  • time-outs
  • loss of privileges
  • natural consequences
  • empathy
  • communication
  • physical punishment
  • aggression
  • correctional strategies
  • consistency
  • constructive discipline
  • open discussions
  • moral development
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