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In the future nobody will buy printed newor books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying.to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#future #nobody #newor #books
Some people believe that in the future we will be able to access all sources of the press and
books
 and there will be no longer
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 to buy and pay money for them.I strongly regard it as
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true and that would
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happen
happened
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happen
 in the near future. Nowadays almost everyone has a smartphone,from the youngest to the oldest person,and these devices have simplified our access to the world.To explain more,before the era of technology people tended to purchase newspapers to know current affairs and they needed to get out
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 homes to buy newspapers and pay
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a sum
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 of money for a
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single
simple
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simple
 source of news.
For example
, for
the
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reading the WASHINGTON POST newspapers only, but now with
the
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 simple click on the touch screen of your
smartphone
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 you are able to see and choose many
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 of news without paying any fee for them. The other
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paper-based
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paper based
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paper-based
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 thing that has changed to digital
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 are
books
. Before smartphones the book stores were very busy and they sold a lot but now there are many people who
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 replaced them with electronic
books
 because of
its
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their
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 benefits.
for example
 one of the big advantages of
e-book
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the e-book
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 is that no tree or forest would
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chop
 down to make papers for publishing and it is
crucial
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a crucial
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 issue in
this
 century and we can
helpto
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help to
help
 deter global warming. The other point is that we can download hundreds of
books
 on our cellphones and read them whenever we want but before
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 for reading a
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book
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book
 we should take and hold it everywhere and they were heavy and sometimes it was impossible to keep reading some places
such
 as subway or on your spare time. To sum up in my opinion online reading is becoming more and more radical and widespread and humans are noticing that the total benefits of online
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are
 much bigger than dated previous way and
is
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 becoming more
trend
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.
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