Some people says that music is a good way of bringing people of different culturs and ages to gather. What to extend do you agree or disagree.

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is a great context
to
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getting together various
type
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of
humans
naturally.
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having
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from different ages,
culture
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cultures
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,
gender
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and gender
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are able to come together in order to
listen
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music
.I
agree
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this
idea strongly...Two basic
factor
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factors
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push me to think like
this
.One of them is international
music
festivals
.At the time of international
festivals
all around the world,
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number of
person
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people
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are collected
one
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center
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.
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even
humans
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though humans
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do not share
same
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place, with
music
they can share
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similar
similiar
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similar
feelings and thoughts. Each year , especially developed countries are organized international
music
festivals
.Thank
to
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these
festivals
,
persons
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people
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those
loving
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music
are eager to attend these
festivals
. Each festival has
spesific
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specific
topic
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topics
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and
concept
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concepts
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such
as love,
peace
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and peace
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in order to attract potential
joiner
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joiners
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.Those attending
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the festival
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festival
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festivals
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not only
listen
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music
at the same time, they consider over festival topic and concept.
To
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example, in my
village
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the natives are
organized
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music
festival for supporting
village
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the village
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peaceful atmosphere. And some
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are done by
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scientists
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over
this
music
festival.Survey
show
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us, with the commence of
this
festival, the rate of
turists
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tourists
are on the
raise
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rise
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.So, it is fact that
music
festivals
help us to
collecting
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people around
the
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some
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direction. Nowadays, especially teenagers are addicted to
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listen
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music
by
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online
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platform
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platforms
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such
as youtube,
spotify
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,
vimeo
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... These platforms are
great
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way
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ways
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to express
humans
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arts,
talents
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and talents
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. In the old times, only
limited
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number of
sellection
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selection
humans
had to offer their skills.But today
fourtunetly
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fortunately
, via these tools
humans
express their feelings and ideas throughout
music
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the music
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. Even
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the producer
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producer
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producers
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can take feedback from
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a listener
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listener
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listeners
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from
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the commend
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commend
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comment
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section.It is amazing
opportunities
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to
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create
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creat bound
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create bond
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among listeners and
producer
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producers
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. As
the
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times
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rolls
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on, some
of
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producers
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may transform
popular
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person
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people
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and it
results
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enthusiasm of listeners. Those listening same person ,
ecole
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or group
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create
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creat
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create
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fun club on social media. By fun club,
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strong connection is created among to attender. As a
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result
resut
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result
,
ıt
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it
is clear that
music
has
powerful
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instrument to connect
humans
each
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other.
Festivals
and social media, both of them play
significant
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a significant
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role
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roles
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to get
humans
together...
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