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What are the advantages and disadvantages of leaving your country to live or study abroad?

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Nowadays, many
people
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 move to another country either to work or study for a couple of years or even the rest of their life.
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people
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, especially young
people
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 find other
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 more livable than their own country.
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, there are both pros and cons of living or studying abroad. In
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aspects to draw some
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. Let’s start looking at the advantages of living or studying abroad. One of the main benefits of heading overseas is having a better learning opportunity.
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, in a developing country like Bangladesh where
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 of students is too high compared to available teachers in
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institute
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, it is quite difficult for students to get proper attention from teachers.
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, where foreign
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 approach teaching students using advanced technologies, Bangladesh and some other developing
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 still
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 the old school method of teaching.
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, adults often tend to move to foreign
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 to earn a better living. The currency and salary rates often compel
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 to live
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abroad.
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, a programmer in Iran earns about $10,000 while the same job in Canada is paid more than $70,000 yearly. Turning to the other side of the argument of living abroad, culture shock is a major problem.
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 find it difficult to cope
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with
language
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 barrier, the food, the weather and cultural differences.
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,
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 who immigrated to Saudia Arabia for
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a job
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job
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jobs
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 find
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 to work in
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hot weather where the temperature exceeds 50 degrees Celsius.
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, the native
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 of Saudia Arabia
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 in Arabic as it is their mother tongue. Migrants find it difficult to communicate with them.Another issue of living abroad is the high living cost
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the
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overseas.
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, the rent of a 2 BHK flat in Bangladesh is approximately $100
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 the rent of 2 BHK in Qatar is approximately $900 per month. All things considered, living abroad either for study or
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 is never easy. A person needs to weigh up the pros of the better learning scope, upgrading living
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 and so on and the cons of culture shock and overpriced living. In my
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 the benefits of living abroad surpass the negative aspects.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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