The computer is widely used in education today. Some people believe that teachers will not play an important role in the classroom in the future.

It is frequently noted that
computers
will utilize
instead
of teachers, and educators' roles will not be more significant,
such
as today.
Although
computers
are used in a wide range nowadays, I completely disagree that their roles will definitely be replaced
instead
of the one who is teaching, because it
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lack of high qualify of comprehensive
education
and sensitivity of pupils.
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and foremost, there will occur a lack of qualify
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comprehensive
education
, because teachers have
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methods for each individual
students
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to easily get lectures,
on the contrary
computer just systemized with several modes. In
this
case, if a student does not apprehend these methods which
computers
embrace,
then
will happen trouble. After all, a drop in
education
will occur as can be expected.
Furthermore
, students, particular schoolchildren will become
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because
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the computer
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computer
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computers
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can't share information and feelings together as a whole
such
as
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a teacher
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teacher
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.
This
implies that children will become heartless and cannot realize
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emotions
emotional
emotionals
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emotions
and feelings just like a robot which
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was made with a lot of knowledge. To conclude, I feel strongly that educators' role will not reduce in the future,
although
computer
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is widely used in
education
today and o would recommend that both teachers and
computers
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together as distance learning in the future too
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