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The computer is widely used in education today. Some people believe that teachers will not play an important role in the classroom in the future.

#computer #education #people #teachers #role #classroom #future
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It is frequently noted that
computers
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 will utilize
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 of teachers, and educators' roles will not be more significant,
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 as today.
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computers
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 are used in a wide range nowadays, I completely disagree that their roles will definitely be replaced
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 of the one who is teaching, because it
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 lack of high qualify of comprehensive
education
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 and sensitivity of pupils.
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 and foremost, there will occur a lack of qualify
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 comprehensive
education
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, because teachers have
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 methods for each individual
students
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student
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 to easily get lectures,
on the contrary
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 computer just systemized with several modes. In
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 case, if a student does not apprehend these methods which
computers
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 embrace,
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 will happen trouble. After all, a drop in
education
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 will occur as can be expected.
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, students, particular schoolchildren will become
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and
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because
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the computer
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computer
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computers
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 can't share information and feelings together as a whole
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 as
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a teacher
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teacher
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teachers
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.
This
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 implies that children will become heartless and cannot realize
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emotions
emotional
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emotions
 and feelings just like a robot which
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was made with a lot of knowledge. To conclude, I feel strongly that educators' role will not reduce in the future,
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computer
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 is widely used in
education
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 today and o would recommend that both teachers and
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utilize
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 together as distance learning in the future too
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