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modern life is chaotic in present time. Do you agree or disagree

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Nowadays, life
became
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has become
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fast pacing
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a fast-paced
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 race in which nobody
wanted
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wants
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 to stop even for a bit. People are facing a plethora of hurdles from living relaxed and comfortable living.
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, modernisation brought a revolution in every scenario, but it extended the chaos to a different level. I personally agree that, it detriment
personal
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, professional and social life. Despite all
facilities
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the facilities
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 in present existence, citizens worked hard to cope with exorbitant living standards and expenses. Most of the employees have to work long hours on
daily
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a daily
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 basis without receiving any holidays or promotions to earn that money. Workers are exploited,
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, to wrap up their unachievable projects on a scheduled timeline, which
made
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makes
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 them psychologically exhausted.
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 of that depressive mood and lengthier stay at , the office human beings get dissociated from family and relatives. It is unsurprising to see divorces at a higher ratio
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 work-life imbalance. Apart from that, advancement erodes basic moral values and
enhanced
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enhances
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 the competitive nature amongst people.
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 of cooperating and helping each other out, they ought to succeed by destroying offenders' careers or even personalities.
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, People even talk to others with intended benefits,
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 avoid the conversation. Is it really worth it?
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 it even existed in the past, now, since humane acts dropped, increased unpredictably.
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, bonding with society is nowhere to
find
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be found
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. In conclusion, Modernisation is confusing in every way; either with the outer world or with own self. It is happening
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 the potential that we have the option to choose between the right or wrong side.

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Avoid using clichés and unclear phrases to maintain a formal tone.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are clearly present, providing a good framework for the essay.
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The essay provides a reasonable overall response to the task with arguments related to personal, professional, and social life.
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