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Life was better when technology was simpler. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

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Opinions are divided on whether
life
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 was better before the advent of modern
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. I believe that certain aspects of
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 were seemingly better without technological advances, but our
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 has been radically improved with the help of
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. Granted, older generations often say that their social
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 was better when
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 was simple.
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, old
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 now often complain that modern
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 depend too much on communication tools
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 as social media sites.
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 dependence has inevitably led to lower levels of face-to-face interaction, potentially undermining
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’s relationships.
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, without modern communication tools,
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 previously had to depend on letters to keep in touch with those living far away.
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 could take days or even weeks for a person to receive a letter, but
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 nowadays can instantly call or text each other via social networking sites. If used in moderation, these advanced communication tools can keep
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 ‘closer’ to one another, greatly improving their relationships. To add
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 credence to my assertion, I note how
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 has evidently enhanced numerous other aspects of
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.
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 and foremost, with advanced irrigation systems and the use of pesticides, crop yields have been improved exponentially. The abundance of food in most parts of the world has helped deal with starvation and hunger, and so relieved large proportions of the world population of the constant day-to-day struggle to survive.
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, improvements in medical
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 mean that sick
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 are treated more effectively, thereby allowing
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 to live longer and enjoy their lives more.
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, the internet has facilitated teleworking and online learning, allowing a great number of
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 to pursue their educational or professional goals.
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 greatly contributes to their
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 satisfaction. In conclusion,
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, albeit potentially creating some problems if misused, has undoubtedly made modern
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 much better when compared to the past.
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