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Life was better when technology was simpler. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

#life #technology
Opinions are divided on whether
life
 was better before the advent of modern
technology
. I believe that certain aspects of
life
 were seemingly better without technological advances, but our
life
 has been radically improved with the help of
technology
. Granted, older generations often say that their social
life
 was better when
technology
 was simple.
For example
, old
people
 now often complain that modern
people
 depend too much on communication tools
such
 as social media sites.
This
 dependence has inevitably led to lower levels of face-to-face interaction, potentially undermining
people
’s relationships.
However
, without modern communication tools,
people
 previously had to depend on letters to keep in touch with those living far away.
This
 could take days or even weeks for a person to receive a letter, but
people
 nowadays can instantly call or text each other via social networking sites. If used in moderation, these advanced communication tools can keep
people
 ‘closer’ to one another, greatly improving their relationships. To add
further
 credence to my assertion, I note how
technology
 has evidently enhanced numerous other aspects of
life
.
First
 and foremost, with advanced irrigation systems and the use of pesticides, crop yields have been improved exponentially. The abundance of food in most parts of the world has helped deal with starvation and hunger, and so relieved large proportions of the world population of the constant day-to-day struggle to survive.
Furthermore
, improvements in medical
technology
 mean that sick
people
 are treated more effectively, thereby allowing
people
 to live longer and enjoy their lives more.
Finally
, the internet has facilitated teleworking and online learning, allowing a great number of
people
 to pursue their educational or professional goals.
This
 greatly contributes to their
life
 satisfaction. In conclusion,
technology
, albeit potentially creating some problems if misused, has undoubtedly made modern
life
 much better when compared to the past.
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