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Parent are the best teachers. Do you agree or disagree

#parent #teachers
Many people think only professors can improve the quality of education,
however
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parents
 sometimes teach betta than teachers. I completely agree that
parents
 are the best teachers in the world because they put the foundation and moral value
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 children’s life. On the one
hand
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parents
 are the basis of human life.
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 of the most important things a parent can teach their baby is to talk. When close relatives or family members talk to each other,
this
 conversation affects the baby.
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addition
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 it is
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up
 the
parents
 how to friends around him when he goes to school for the
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 because
parents
 teach people how to behave in
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. If a child goes to school for the
first
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taking
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 to anyone, he won’t make friends so
parents
 teach him to talk . On other
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 we have
such
 values that teachers cannot explain. In
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meaning
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 academy can’t provide a complete education in the proper sense of the word
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 for moral and life
value
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. We study maths, physics, history and so on in our textbooks but it doesn’t teach us the values we need to do or learn. And our
parents
 teach us each of them , give us
eseful
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useful
 advise throughout our lives and stay with us in
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 situation. Pedagogues are an exception. In a nutshell,
mather’s
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 and
father’s
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 are without a doubt the best teacher that every person have.
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Them
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 are
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the
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 gives everything for us to become a better person.
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